Can someone help me revise my essay?

it's about Timothy Treadwell. i don't have my conclusion yet so revise what i have right now.



Some can argue if Timothy Treadwell is a transcendentalist or not. One can say he is a little transcendentalist but not 100% based on what he showed us in his videos. Some can see him as a crazy person or a person doing what’s best for our planet by showing us what would happen if the bears don’t have enough food or something bad like that. Treadwell wants the world to take care of our animals and nature. Once it’s gone, it can never come back again. Three things that Treadwell shows that he is a little transcendentalist are why people don’t get him, what he did, and the negative qualities of Treadwell.





When Treadwell was a little kid, he always loved bears. He had his favorite stuffed bear while he was growing up. One day he wanted to do more with his life so he went to Alaska and protect the bears. People didn’t understand and still might not understand why he would risk his life for 13 summers to live with the bears. Emerson once said, “To be great is to be misunderstood.” He wanted to show people that we need to take care of our planet if we want to see bears and any other animal live forever. So this movie he made might help the world to stop and smell the roses and do something to make sure that we wont lose any of these animals. He wants humans and animals to live in harmony and hunting animals and trashing our planet wont help them. Therou said “Heaven is under our feet as well as our heads.”



While he was doing the things he believed in, he was breaking the law. He had to be so far away from the bears and he couldn’t touch them. Also he had to camp out in the open so the bears know where he was but in the last summer he was there, he camped in a spot that wasn’t out in the open. Then he and his girlfriend were killed. He thought he was the bears “protector”. Therou once said, “Living is so dear.” Treadwell thought if didn’t go to Alaska and protect the bears, and then he wasn’t living at all. He had a very simple life. Like what Therou said, “Simplify! Simplify!” Therou also said “I did not want to find, when it came time to die, that I have not lived.” He never wanted anyone to harm the bears and that’s why he never brought one with him for all those years. he would be mad if he found out that someone did not follow his order, “if I die out here, do not come find my body and do not harm the bear who killed me.” He thought he was a better choice to go out to Alaska than protect them where he was living during the winter and fall seasons. There were some negative aspects of Treadwell’s 13 summer’s journey to Alaska.



Even though Treadwell lived in the wild for so many years doing something good, towards the end, his motive changed. The change wasn’t for the good. For example, he thought he was the only person who can protect the bears from humans who hunt them down. Also he used the bears as a reason why he stopped drinking heavily and for other reasons. Therou said that “The great man is he who believes that what is true for himself is true for all humanity.” When you watch the end of the movie, it seems like he wanted to be a celebrity because he was doing action scenes. Like, jumping the bushes and the trees. He never had anything with him that would help to survive if he was being attacked by a bear. It doesn’t seem right to drop everything down and move away for a couple of months. Therou also said “A man is rich in proportion to the number of things he can afford to leave behind.” One can say that the negative things Treadwell did is affecting him to be a true transcendentalist.
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